Issue 1 - Positivity can help lower your heart disease risk

Both Linh and Daniel has made their own critical points

Both Linh and Daniel have made their own critical points

this approach could work for anyone that has good discipline, which is not many nowadays

this approach would only benefit those who already possess strong self-discipline — a quality that is increasingly rare today

what Daniel has delivered sounds more reasonable

what Daniel has argued sounds more convincing

On the other hands

On the other hand

socializing or regularly practiced exercises, which could clear up and broaden our tangled minds, and directly increase both emotional well-being and heart health simultaneously

socializing and regular physical exercise can sharpen mental clarity and simultaneously improve both emotional well-being and cardiovascular health

decrease our smartphone time screen usage

decrease our screen time

it is absolutely not a bad idea

it is certainly worthwhile

Electronic devices could increase obesity

Excessive use of electronic devices may contribute to sedentary behavior and weight gain

implicitly make users feel stressed and anxious

subtly elevate stress and anxiety levels

clear up and broaden our tangled minds

alleviate mental clutter and expand cognitive clarity

Concludingly (?)

In conclusion/ To conclude/ Ultimately