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Script+Thesis DEV JOINT NOTES

1.9. Michaels Class

Other ppls ideas:

- Leevi: mute white nationalist snuff film ADR

- Heloise: daddys favourite girl (focus on a father that unknowingly watches erotic content featuring her daughter)

- Jan: CBI sleazy guy

- Liva: about her grandad, bodybuilder/losing hearing

- Paul: Eesti muumio 

My idea feedback:

- where did the depression come from, what needs to be changed? What are the roots

- include a scene where we see the bond between E & A is close (maybe after the fight and A banging her head)

--> Emi "comforting" Alma, maybe reciting a poem Alma wrote on melancholy, playfully wrapping her in a blanket and petting her

Alma could have a creative job that is both inspired and harmed by the depression. Writing? Music? 

New outline to pitch by Monday

4.9. Kaurs Class

Goals:

  • try to remove inhibitions

  • Dont be afraid to go big, you can always go smaller

Send Michaels feedback and updated outline to Kaur: Kaurkokk@gmail.com

My worries:

  • How to try avoid letting the high conceptness take over

What kind of an approach?:

  • Narrative style of Haneke

  • Long shots, let moments become difficult and hard to digest

  • One shot of sudden eye contact

8.9. Qs in class

Who is the protagonist and how do you know

  • Alma, she is everpresent throughout. The whole story moves through her fighting against Emi ie the depression. Alma is the protagonist and Emi is the antagonist

Discussion:

  • Is it essential to see film from protags POV?

    • POV character and protag, they dont need to be the same but usually they are (example, Great Gatsby)

    • How would you tell the same story from another characters POV? They’re not the active agent

    • Maybe mine could be see through the lens of the guy who she is seeing, girl is hiding the fact that she is has a person on her back

    • The girl i met on discord hasnt wanted to meet me yet. We finally met, she is carrying another girl on her back, but she tried to avoid the discussion on it.

  • What gets in the way of the protagonist

    • obstacles (difference between obstacles and antagonist? Agency is the big thing, antagonist has a goal that collides someway with protags. Obstacle doesnt have agency, not goal oriented even if a person (e.g. Someone happens to complain to you when you are in a hurry)

    • Conflict (usually generated by protag)

    • Antagonist

    • Acts of god

    • Disconnection from other people (mothers womb blablabla)

    • Clock (e.g. Before sunrise, where they have 12h, no other conflict)

  • Which of these are we useing for our story already? Which could we potentially use? Which not?

    • We are using disconnection already, and antagonist

      • Highlighting this is tricky, dangling the reconnection or offering and taking away can create drama

      • Close to connection but then taken away (relationship with the guy until its stopped by antagonist, depression)

    • potentially the clock (12 before the date at punk club)

    • I dont think acts of god work here, or any other physical obstacles

  • What is your genre? Does it matter?

    • Drama?

  • On different genres being picked

    • Drama

    • Thriller

    • Horror

    • Mystery

    • Absurdist

    • Comedy

  • In general

    • Scifi

    • Action

    • Fantasy

    • Adventure

    • Educational

    • Crime

  • Does it matter?

    • Yes? Less important in shorts than in tv and film

    • Helps us as writers, helps us understand expectations and subvert them

    • Helps us hit the mark, and even be more memorable for people since easier to digest

    • Helps us avoid predictability

  • Imagine your story in another genre:

    • As a comedy or scifi i would make it so that the depression character is completely inseparable from protag

    • As comedy, follow the process of this woman trying to get help from anyone around her after she wakes up and finds this other person stuck to her. Dressing up in a shirt that can fit them both, depression acting like they have always been friends, so surprised that protag is shocked

    • Scifi, same but reactions build slower, she goes to a doctor where they xray her and see how the other person is physically fused to her

  • What are your themes?

    • What is the film about?

    • 5 keywords that describe what your story is about?

      • (Longterm) depression (umbrella category)

      • Hope (for a meaningful connection)

      • Intrusive thoughts / Rumination

      • Melancholy (about your unwanted existance)

      • Trauma (from rejection by family and others)

    • When writing the theme chan shift back and forth, making it tricky

    • ”Having is evidence of wanting”

      • western existential-kink crowd poses that maybe even things that you seemingly dont want are things you want

    • Why do you want to write about this topic:

      • Im gonna be honest and say that its selfreflective, not totally autobiographical, but as a person going to therapy for 5yrs, and meds for even more, and STILL being afflicted is frustrating

    • New step outline (focus on SOUND this time as well)

11.9. Kaurs class

Alina meet:

  • possible actress from NÄTY