Persuasive writing

 persuasive writing practice

Should smoking cigarettes be banned in all public place’’ 

Did you know smoking cigarettes has a huge impact on people's daily life and their health. 4/10 smokers die each year because of it. Smoking can lead to many problems such as lung cancer. 

Smoking can also affect people around you especially young kids this is called secondary smoking it can damage their lungs and affect their mental health. 

Smoking in public places is a choice however it harms so many people counting themselves and people around them, this brings me to my point if smoking is so harmful why don't we ban it in public places some industries are already doing this however some profit from it being selfish wanting money over thousands of peoples health. 

Smoking kills damages smokers and people around them such as friends and family it can affect them physically and mentally. 4/10 smokers die each year 3/10 secondary smokers die cause of the effects of smoking each year so if you don't stop it for yourself stop for people around you. Help them Help us Help the environment. Give in your piece to help 

table of techniques

 

techniques 

Quotes for when it was used in text 

 

 

statistics 

4/10 smokers die each year because of it. These numbers create a sense of urgency and credibility. 

repetition 

Help them Help us Help the environment. Give in your piece to help This encourages the audience to think and agree with the argument. 

Emotive language  

Words like "selfish," "damage," "harmful," and "kills" evoke strong emotions to persuade the reader. 

Rhetorical questions  

Did you know smoking cigarettes has a huge impact on people's daily life and their health. This encourages the audience to think and agree with the argument. 

Direct address 

"If you don't stop it for yourself, stop for people around you." Speaking directly to the reader makes it more personal and impactful. 

Cause and effect 

The text highlights how smoking leads to lung cancer and harms others, making the dangers clear. 

Second attempt on question 

Did you know that smoking not only harms smokers but also puts innocent lives at risk? Every year, 4 out of 10 smokers die due to smoking related illnesses. Even worse, 3 out of 10 secondary smokers those exposed to second hand smoking also lose their lives because of it. 

Smoking causes severe health problems, including lung cancer, heart disease, and breathing disorders. But it doesn’t just affect smokers. Children, family members, and even strangers in public spaces are forced to inhale toxic smoke, which can damage their lungs and impact their mental health. This is known as secondary smoking, and it is just as dangerous. 

Some industries and public spaces have already taken steps to limit smoking. However, others profit from this deadly habit, valuing money over human lives. If we know smoking is so harmful, why are we still allowing it in public places? 

It’s time to act. Smoking doesn’t just affect you it harms your friends, your family, and even the environment. If you won’t stop for yourself, stop for the people around you. 

Help them. Help us. Help the environment. Every small effort counts let’s work together to make public spaces smoke free. 

TARGETS  

  • Add more emotion to text 

  • More adress to audience  

  • More accurate statistics  

  • Stay on topic  

  • Give more examples 

  • Link back to question 

  • Give text more structure