English Notes - Sem 2 2024

Planning:

Motifs and symbols:

• Establish motifs and symbols that communicate the danger

• Metaphors, similes, personification

• The colour of the radium – Prolepsis or flash forward

• Personifying radium

• Time – Watched, clocks, girl’s lives (everything is dictated by time)

Setting:

• In the workplace

• Describe the setting and atmosphere

• Sensory imagery

• Verisimilitude – Believable/Realistic

• Watched, monitored

• Quiet - suppressed

Characterisation:

• A character who is still slightly worried

• A character who feels silly for having been worried

• 1920s Slang

• 1920s Cultural reference

Sequence:

• Establish setting

• Introduce character and situation

• Contrast main character & girl behind her

• Somebody has a “symptom”

  • Blood on handkerchief

  • Pimples

  • Sore jaw/toothache

  • Dizziness

How to write a creative writing (short)

1. Establish a sense of place, embed values in the setting

   • Use sensory imagery – Sight, sound, smell, touch and taste

   • Use figurative language – A motif, pick out key details

2. Establish a sense of character/s

   • Use dialogue and individual voice

3. Initiate plot – What is happening create conflict / a block

   • The block is or isn’t overcome

Potential figurative language:

• Vitality of girls

• Glow of radium – magic

• Seasonal imagery - Spring or summer

• Pathetic fallacy – Looks like a nice day but is supposed to rain

Descriptions of characters:

Rotor – Arrogant,

Von sochocky – Kind, Caring, Altruistic, Optimistic, Arancular

MacNeil –

Irene – Innocent,

Vignette Planning:

• Arrival at the factory

• Whistle blown at the start and end of shifts

• The supervision of Mrs McNeil – Lack of trust, expected to need correcting

Vignette:

Brong, Brong, Brong, the bell was ringing as I sprinted down the crumbling pavement on my street, how could I oversleep on my first day? I thought. Working at the U.S. Radium corporation was the dream job, and after months of waiting to be accepted, countless days wishing, and many letters between me and my best friends, I had overslept!

The bells vibrant ring had just ended, and I knew that meant I was officially late. There was the factory as bright as usual gleaming in the rising sun of a hot summer’s day. As I pushed the heavy industrial doors of the factory as butterflies gathered in my stomach, this was it. I yanked my timecard out of my pouch and stamped it as fast as humanly possible, I left it on the bench and continued sprinting down the long corridors, until reaching room 309, my room.

I gripped the door handle, and my stomach exploded with worry, happiness, and pure joy, I turned the handle, and there I stood staring into the busy room, with everyone staring right back at me.