Subject-Verb Agreement and Cost Analysis in Sentence Structure
The sentence structure is identified as consisting of a subject and a verb.
The main verb in the example discussed is identified as "cost."
Focus Point: The overall subject relates to the cost of lenses in photography.
Another verb identified in the sentence is "makes," indicating it refers to a quality or state (makes photography an expensive hobby).
Two subjects were identified in the analysis:
Subject 1: Cameras and professional lenses
Subject 2: Costing as much as a small car
The question posed is about what makes photography an expensive hobby.
Answer: It is specifically the cost of cameras and professional lenses that contributes to it being termed as an expensive hobby.
Clarification on whether the subject is singular or plural:
"Cameras and professional lenses" is plural.
Misconception identified: Using the verb "makes" with a plural subject is incorrect.
Correct conjugation: Cameras and professional lenses that cost as much as a small car make photography an expensive hobby.
Student error explanation: The incorrect conjugation may stem from proximity to the subject of the costs (a small car), but the actual subject is plural.
Pronoun Reference Clarity:
Example Sentence: "Emily Dickinson is sometimes compared with Jane Austen, but she was quite different."
Clarifying Question: What does the pronoun "she" refer to?
Ambiguity exists around whether "she" refers to Emily Dickinson or Jane Austen.
Substituting Pronouns:
Options to reduce ambiguity include specifying nouns:
Changing to: "Emily Dickinson is sometimes compared with Jane Austen, but Dickinson is quite different."
Alternatively, clarify which one is different:
Both can be noted, e.g., "Despite occasional comparisons, Emily Dickinson and Jane Austen were quite different from each other."
Potential Vague Pronoun Use: The term "it" in sentences can lead to confusion.
Example: "The faculty agreed on changing the requirements, but it took time."
Clarified as needing a subject:
Solutions include: "The faculty agreed on changing their requirements, but the implementation of these changes took time."
Clarification on sentence ambiguity:
Example: "The batter collided with the first baseman, but he wasn’t injured."
Unclarity arises: Who wasn't injured?
Solutions to clarify:
"The batter wasn’t injured when he collided with the first baseman."
If indicating both players remain uninjured, restructure:
"Neither the batter nor the first baseman was injured by the collision."
Vague References: Problems in referencing can often lead to ambiguity, as highlighted by vague terms like "it."
Example: "It is already fully healed."
Clarification needed on what "it" refers to. Correcting via explicit antecedents allows clarity.
Corrected to specify: "Grandmother's heart is already fully healed after cardiac surgery."
Modifiers:
Misplaced Modifiers: Misplaced modifiers can lead to misunderstanding.
Example: "He serves cake to the men on paper plates."
The modifier refers incorrectly to "men"; correct structure required.
Suggested correction to place modifier accurately: “He serves cake on paper plates to the men.”
Dangling Modifiers:
Example 1: "Passing the building, the vandalism became visible."
Correction: Specify who is passing the building: “As we passed the building, the vandalism became visible.”
Example 2: "Although intact, graffiti covered every inch of the walls and windows."
Correction involves mentioning the actual subject being referred to:
“Although the building was intact, graffiti covered every inch of the walls and windows.”
Sentence Fragments and Comma Splices:
A complete sentence requires a subject and a verb.
Example of a sentence fragment: "The wind blowing." — missing a subject or verb to be complete.
Example of a comma splice: "The ship was huge, its mast stood 20 meters high."
Corrections involve replacing the comma:
Change to: "The ship was huge; its mast stood 20 meters high."
Peer Editing and Common Errors: Students are encouraged to research their drafts, focusing on clause structures, grammar errors, and ensuring clear communication throughout their essays.
Editing Checklist:
Check for:
Clarity in pronouns
Proper subject-verb agreement
Correct use of modifiers
Avoiding comma splices and sentence fragments
Focus on higher-level writing elements: organizational structure, thesis clarity, and supporting arguments.